A short ballad. A big focus of this one is imagery--not sure how it turned out, but that's what I was going for. I started this one about four or five times and kept not liking where it was going, and I guess I am still unsure about the ending.
Also, I recommend this be read aloud.
Do you like the imagery? Any other thoughts on it?
What about the ending? Too sudden? Does it wrap up the poem, or is it too vague?
Punctuation comments? Any problems?
Any meter problems?
How about the title?
What meaning do you take from the poem? I'm just curious.
And of course any other critiques/comments are awesome as well.
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Edit: I got a DD?? I am so incredibly excited about this. Thank you to everyone!!!